雅思托福高分作文范文(必备10篇)

雅思托福高分作文范文 第1篇

11，It is advertising makes customers buysomething impulsively.

正确形式：It is advertising that makes customers buy something impulsively.

错误解析：因为 is 和makes 都是动词，所以该句话有2个动词，需要去掉一个动词，本句中可以把makes 前面增加that,这样后面就是定于从句了。 从而该句就只有一个动词。

12，There is a research shows thatmany parents are depend on teachers give support.

正确形式：There is a research showing that many parents are depending on teachers who give support.

错误解析：本句的错误太多，主要是谓语动词太多，要记住一个主句只能有一个位于动词，而一个从句也只能有一个谓语动词。而主句中的is和show就是多一个重复了，而从句中：are ,depend, give都是动词，而只能有一个动词。

13，There was a famous Chinesebook describe a monkey , a pig , a sand monk and a true monk go to west forpilgrimage.

,确形式：There was a famous Chinese book describing a monkey , a pig , a sand monk and a true monk go to west for pilgrimage.

错误解析：要记住一个主句只能有一个谓语动词，而一个从句也只能有一个谓语动词。而主句中的was 和describe就是多一个重复了，需要将describe 修改为：describing 作为后置定语。

14，The number of the populationwas decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure of population was increased inthe years of 1996 and 2000, the data was then continue increase in the last 5years.

正确形式：The number of the population decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure of population increased in the years of 1996 and 2000, and the data was then continuously increasing in the last 5years.

错误解析：要记住一个主句只能有一个谓语动词，而该句中的谓语动词太多， 所以需要去掉was 并且将最后一个分句中的was then continue increase 中的continue改成副词continuously, decrease 改成was decreasing.

15，I earned the money is the least.

正确形式：I earned the least money.或者my income was the least.

16， was a wolf come from Nanjing.

正确形式：I was a wolf coming from Nanjing.

17，ow there are always many new things come out every day.

正确形式：Now there are always many new things coming out every day.

18， 谓语动词：

错误表达:There have many people believe that mobile phones are useful.

正确表达：There are many people who believe that mobile phones are useful.

错误解析：（不存在There have的形式，而且There be结构后不能再加谓语动词。）

雅思托福高分作文范文 第2篇

托福考试写作上的技巧可以参考如下：

就是对翻译文做修改，看和自带自动修改的软件做比较，查找自己需要修改的地方反复做练习。达到熟能生巧。

第三对文章的布局，技巧做研究，知道自己表达的弱点，使语言表达能够运用自如。

第四，可以将英文翻译成汉语，然后再讲汉语翻译成英语，不断学习。以提高使用的技巧性。

托福作文写作应该分为三个层次，也 就 是确定中心思想后应该找三个 理 由来支持。托福写作还有一个五段论，第一段为中心思想，二三四为支持段落，第五段总结观点。这个 就 是所谓的八股文。但是形式不能太明显，在表达中多 加 入自己的思想，让文章的形式不会显得那么死板。一般这种作文可以在托福写作中取得高分。另外 你 临考之前的话北京新东方那边有托福点题与模考班，有技巧、模考及讲评，对即将考试的学生很有帮助， 你 可以去看看。

要拿下托福综合写作，阅读、听力都很重要。

1.阅读：寻找核心句和关键词，

英美人写文章的总体逻辑可以概括为总分或总分总。而托福综合写作的阅读材料多为前者布局，且多为四段式(首段总起，三段分别展开)。

2.听力：判断说话人立场，记录观点和支持性论据

听力环节的笔记很重要，是决定综合写作能否顺利完成的关键因素。

没有经过训练或者疏于练习的同学会对于该记什么无从下手，结果就是笔记做了，自己看不懂，或者笔记太过凌乱，毫无可利用性。

报班系统学习很有必要哦

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一 、善用高级词汇

英语写作，最怕无词可用，要拿高分，不仅单词量要过关，还要会几个高级词汇，同样的一句话，用高级词汇来描述肯定能加分。

二、准备一篇万能文章

提前准备一篇文章，精雕细琢，能用到不同场合不同语境的那种，最好不要全盘照搬所谓的满分作文，否则容易减分，之前，有人考研时用了所谓新东方满分作文，结果作文零分，尽量自己应用相关句型语法仿写一篇。

三、写好开头结尾

考试阅卷很注重效率，所以首尾段是阅卷老师看的重点。

第一段开篇第一句话一定要给阅卷老师眼前一新的感觉，一个长的语法句型，配合高级词汇，一看就不是一般水平能写出来的。

最后一段，同样要注重经典句式和词汇的使用。

不能头重脚轻，虎头蛇尾！

四、单词尽量不重复

要体现你的词汇量大，并不要满篇都是高级词汇，多了反倒滥了……

简单词汇也可以用得很高级，同样一句话多次出现，尽量用不同语法、不同短语、不同单词来表现，含义不变，但是表达更具有多样化，同样会加分！

我曾经帮助过的Miss Rong, 考取了托福写作30分，她已经和动词君打成平手了！她目前在美国威斯康星大学攻读心理学博士学位。重点来咯！！！你不可错过的托福写作满分30分宝典~

Q：独立写作写了多少字？

A：动词君，我去查了下那天的真题回忆了一下，字数我不记得了，但我应该是尽量写多，手速真的超级快。我平常练习的时候，估计独立作文有500字左右。

敲黑板！！！：字写多点儿

Q：作文的结构是什么？每一段的结构是什么？

A：结构的话我写的是一个条件性论证，题目是该不该每周给零花钱，我写的是在一些情况下这是有益的，在另一些情况下是不好的，所以如果要给的话家长要注意同时给一些引导。

敲黑板！！！：独立写作的观点可以保持中立，进行正反两面论证。但是！！！动词君提醒大家，初学者还是尽量把观点进行一边倒，不要勉强自己，得不偿失。

Q：词汇的使用怎么样？你用太难的词汇没有？

A：我没有特地要选一些很难的词的，不过因为当时刚考完GRE，顺手用了一些GRE词汇，但是没有刻意堆难词。

敲黑板！！！：什么叫顺手用了一些GRE词汇？？？（捂脸），比如像pulchritudinous，pensiveness，heedlessness这样的词汇吗？？？动词君提醒大家，想要考到高分，要尽量多使用高级词汇。机器评阅要测评文章当中，词汇的长度。

Q：举例的深度怎么样？

A：举例这个太具体了，我现在不太想得起来举的什么例子了，不过应该不是什么很高深的例子因为我也记不住那些，为了写起来顺手我一般都会说my friend怎样怎样。

敲黑板！！！：举例论证的时候不用太刻意寻求高深，可以举一些生活当中的例子。当然词汇、句型也不能太low，不然写出来的跟小学生没有什么区别。

Q：如果要写好作文，你的建议是什么？

A：托福的作文的话我觉得看范文还挺有效果的，学一些连词短语的表达，立刻就能用上，词汇也丰富一些。另外就是对于一些题目可以像GRE作文一样，把题目拓展，比如分情况讨论，在什么情况下好，什么情况下不好，这样容易写得更深更长，但因为托福作文要求没那么高，只要稍作拓展就可以了，也不会太难。

敲黑板！！！：看范文，词汇丰富，条件性论证。

希望我的回答对你有帮助。

1个月如何复习托福写作？

一.1个月如何复习托福独立写作

正常来说，写作备考应该有一个初期词汇和素材积累的过程，但是我们现在来说只有一个月复习时间的话，我们直接从范文开始看，不再单独去积累词汇和素材。

很多学生也知道通过看范文来充实自己的写作食粮，然而往往看与不看貌似没神马差别。

首先，阅读高分及满分范文，不是去赏析一篇散文，阅读过程中需要我们去分析范文中的词汇、句式以及一些素材，然后把这些内容都做一个积累本。

一篇范文看完后，学习到哪些内容应该自己再去总结一下，最后在自己写作的时候尽量的去套用。范文建议分类别看，比如我们集中看5篇教育类范文，就可以积累相对应的教育类作文常用的素材和词汇，那么自己写教育类作文的时候就可以把积累下来的词和素材得以运用。

二.1个月如何复习托福综合写作

一个复习托福综合写作的话，综合写作部分的练习建议在模考软件中按照考试流程来进行，在规定的时间内读阅读、听听力、然后计时写作，写的过程中注意以下几点：

1. 单词的拼写，边打字边检查;

2. 三单的问题，也就是每句话的谓语要重点关注语态和时态;

3. 不能出现与阅读内容连续超过6words的重复，也就是说写作中需要用到阅读内容时必须要自己改写;

4. 注意听力内容的转述，不要盲目概括，要清楚听力内容的逻辑;

雅思托福高分作文范文 第3篇

For human being, it is no doubt that living a healthy life is the top priority. Nowadays there is an increasingly popular argument that the government has already done enough in terms of educating people the significance of good nutrition and healthy eating, which has drawn much attention. To my observation, if the government provides more financial support and organizes various educational activities, the public can be more aware of how to maintain good nutrition and healthy eating.

On one hand, as the power center, government is supposed to allocate more money to promote the development of the healthy food industry. If so, with more restaurants providing nutritious dishes, citizens are more likely to eat healthily. Also, as health is the prerequisite for everything, government should take the best use of taxpayers’ money to invest in nutrition and health.

On the other hand, as the beacon to society, government is expected to organize more educational events such as instructional videos and indoor lectures. Given the fact of few such materials and people’s reliance on information issued by government, it can largely educate citizens about what an important aspect healthy eating is and how to do it.

Yet it should be acknowledged that government has done a lot concerning good nutrition and healthy eating. Efforts have been made to issue health-related policies, conduct relevant campaigns and organize related forums.

To sum up, government should do more to promote the importance of good nutrition and healthy eating from the aspects of providing financial support and organizing educational events. With government taking more responsibility, the public can learn more and have a healthy lifestyle.

生词：

priority n. 优先事项

in terms of 关于

financial adj. 财政的，金融的

maintain v. 维持

allocate v. 拨给

prerequisite n. 前提

take the best use of sth. 有效利用

taxpayer n. 纳税人

reliance n.信赖

acknowledge v. 承认，认可返回搜狐，查看更多

雅思托福高分作文范文 第4篇

The graph shows (relates) the percentage of radio and television audiences over 4 years old in the UK (the UK population over 4 years old who tuned in to radio and television) throughout the day from October to December 1992. The figure reveals that before 2:00 pm there were more radio audiences, while after 2:00 pm more people turned to television. There was a gap of 10% between radio and television audiences.

The data indicates that radio listeners increased (grow, rise, go up) substantially before 8:00 am, when the percentage reached (amounted to) to a peak of 27%.

The percentage then declined steadily to 11% at 4:00 pm, which was followed by a slight increase to 15% at 5:00 pm.

However, from then on, there was again a gradual decrease to 2% until 4:00 am, when the percentage bottomed out. The period from 4:00 am to 6:00 am saw another slight rise to 4% in radio listeners.

As for (similarly) TV viewers, the percentage went up from 6:00 am to 8:30 am, when there was a leveling off at 8% until 10:00 am (for the next one hour and a half)

After a slight decrease, the percentage rose sharply to 15% between 12 pm and 2 pm, before it dropped slightly.

The peak (45%) was reached at 8:00 pm after a massive rise from 14% since 3:00 pm.

However, the period between 8:00 pm and 3:00 am saw a slump in television viewers. The percentage reached the bottom of 3% at 3:00 am, when there was a slight rise afterwards.

The general trend was that the percentage of both radio and television audiences rose first and then decrease, while the total number of the latter was bigger than the former. In addition, the prime time for radio and television was 8 am and 8 pm, respectively.

雅思托福高分作文范文 第5篇

The bar chart compares the proportion of employees of both genders employed in executive positions in ACNE Oil Company within a one-year period between July 1993 and June 1994.

As can be seen from the chart, the percentage of male employees generally increased with the rise of the job categories from Grade E to Grade A while the opposite was true with that of women.

Grade A, which was reported as the highest position, was a male dominated one in which only one-tenth of the staff were female while male employees accounted for the rest.

When it comes to Grade B and C, men also took up over half of the employees, accounting for 80% and 60%, which are 50% and 10% higher than that of women respectively.

However, the situation in the other two jobs categories, which were relatively lower in rank, was totally reversed, with women taking up relatively larger proportion. Men constituted roughly 40% in Grade D, 20% less than that if women and most of the working staff in Grade E were women (over 70%) , twice the percentage of men.

To sum up, on the rank ladder of ACME Oil Company, male employees took up a higher and higher proportion than the weaker sex as it gradually went up to the peak -------- Grade A.

雅思托福高分作文范文 第6篇

1, Talking too much but doing too few gives rise to make others a terrible impression.

正确形式：Talking too much but doing too few gives rise to a terrible impression.

错误解析：因为give rise to 是介词短语，后面是不能接动词的，所以必须要修改为名词形式，直接去掉make others.

2, This above phenomenon can be explained by we change our attitudes towards the lifestyles and by we lose interests on local history of indigenous people.

正确形式：This above phenomenon can be explained by changing attitudes towards the lifestyles and by losing interests on local history of indigenous people.

错误解析：因为by 是介词短语，后面是不能接动词的，所以必须要修改为名词形式或者动名词形式，直接将change 和lose 改为changing 和losing.

3, When it comes to ask the questions about the clear definitions of education and career success. People always hold divergent viewpoints.

正确形式：When it comes to the clear definitions of education and career success, people always hold divergent viewpoints.

错误解析：因为when it comes to是介词短语，后面是不能接动词的，所以必须要修改为名词形式或者动名词形式，直接去掉ask the questions，是多余的成分。另外when 引导的只是一个从句，后面需要真正的主句进行支撑，所以要把people小写。

4, I still fail to pass the TOEFL despite I have already collected pencils with 9 kinds of colors.

正确形式：I still fail to pass the TOEFL despite pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

错误解析：因为despite是介词短语，后面是不能接动词或者句子的，可以将其修改为名词形式或者动名词形式，将句子：I have already collected pencils with 9 kinds of colors. 调整为：pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

5， Many fans are crazy about love affairs of Hanhan， a well-known Chinese writer, despite they know that he is a playboy.

正确形式：Many fans are crazy about love affairs of Hanhan，a well-known Chinese writer, despite that they know that he is sometimes a playboy.

错误解析：因为despite是介词短语，后面是不能接动词或者句子的，除了可以将句子修改为名词形式或者动名词形式，也可以将despite 修改为：despite that . 另外韩寒并不是总是playboy,所以加上sometimes.

6, Many students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite they have understood the negatives of illhealth effects.

正确形式: Many students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite the negatives of illhealth effects.

错误解析：介词不是连词，一般后面只接名词或者具备名词性质的短语或者带连词的宾语从句，因此不能加句子。常见错误有：”despite,in spite of , during, because of , due to”, 也不能后接动词。

7, Many poor citizens always depend on the rich give support.

正确形式: Many poor citizens always depend on supports of the rich.

错误解析：介词不是连词，一般后面只接名词或者具备名词性质的短语或者带连词的宾语从句。不能接动词或者句子。

8, Life disorder can lead to damage an individual’s health.正确形式: Life disorder can lead to health recession of an individual.

错误解析：“to”在某些情况下，（如词组“giverise to , contribute to , pay attention to , conform to , lead to”)都是介词短语+名词或者动名词。

9, Nobody could deny the importance of environment protection , for the simple reason is that it is of far-reaching significance in the future .

正确形式: Nobody could deny the importance of environment protection, for its far-reaching significance in the future.

错误解析：特殊的介词，如：”for， since, after, before”在大部分时候都是介词，不接完整的句子。

10, Individuals have different attitudes towards for the definition of happiness.

正确形式：Individuals have different attitudes towards the definition of happiness.

错误解析：介词后面不能再接介词。注意一些比较特殊的介词如：towards。

介词短语加了句号错误表达： With the society develops. people begin to realize the importance of biological balance.

正确形式：With the development of society, people begin to realize the importance of biological balance.（介词短语不是句子，不能加句号）

雅思托福高分作文范文 第7篇

More over, the fact that a lot of youngpeople shop by the impulse of the moment decides that they are much easilyinterfered by celebrities’ suggestions. Take the example of shopping. Based on their(whose?) own pretty faces and the help ofcomputers, ordinary commodities appear to be great beyond reasons. Therefore,it becomes “crucial” for companies to hire celebrities recommending theirproducts, for it’s the best way to call for teenagers’ shopping desire.

雅思托福高分作文范文 第8篇

Basedon that, it wouldn’t be surprising to see what happens to those who are reallyfrantic with celebrities. Some teenagers even scavenge the entire Internet just to look for the(an) item suggested by a TV star. An illusion isquite often looming upon teenagers that the more they do in response to thestar, the closer they are to their models. However, when it comes to the oldergeneration, they usually don’t understand this near madness adoration for the “strangers”. It doesn’t matter to drink a brand ofmilk commented by the movie star Angelababy or the one just (sold) by the corner of the street.

雅思托福高分作文范文 第9篇

Nowadays many adults （直接用adults 是细化思维的体现，不要只是写people, 使句子更贴话题） have full-time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high. （首句不要写太长的背景，要从第一句话就开始描述这个话题，而不是“with the development of society and economy , there is a hotly-debated topic about whether or not …这样的套话，是注定让你丢分的，接下来将变成一个考官验证12分或者15分的过程。那为什么不能写模板呢？这样的句子本身的质量不是很好？威廉老师告诉你，是因为背景写的太大，紧接着就跳入非常具体的话题，这样严重破坏了作文的CC（连贯性）这一评分标准）。 So feelings about one’s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole， and because of this， job satisfaction is indeed very important for the wellbeing of that person. （顺接的很自然）高手应该做到让段落的内容的话题的范文不要太宽，要尽量克制写很多内容的冲动。你有没有发现，当你从第一句就开始写这个话题，从写成年人的工作对于成年人很重要的前提下，自然就过渡到了“工作满意度“的话题，因为话题窄，所以很容易构成有逻辑）。

Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways.（罗列式中心句，就表明接下来会有几个具体的方面需要具体展开） Firstly， a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work， so positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect. A sense of fulfillment is also（also 体现递进，内在的逻辑） encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole. （先接结果后写原因是高分作文特征之一，这样能有效避免观点跳跃）Secondly， when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities，（很细节，并且符合逻辑的观点，也许没有工作经验的同学不能够想到） for example， then there is a sense of progression and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also（递进词，体现内在的逻辑） contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives.（先写结果，后写原因是高分作文的特征之一）Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.

雅思托福高分作文范文 第10篇

However， even though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their work， I think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job. （典型的批判性思维的让步句型，有承上启下的作用。是30分作文最重要的特征之一，从而使句子衔接变得特别到位） If the factors identified above are implemented， then any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job satisfaction. （批判性思维）。